This week for 100wc the prompt,
...As the smoke cleared...
We had to think about :
- Where is the smoke coming from?
- What do you see as it clears?
- Is it good or bad or dangerous?
- What does it smell like?
This is what I wrote, hope you like it,
please comment.
I had done it! I had won, it was right there in front of me like a trophy glittering on a shelf. I reached out to grab it, its shiny outer, connected with my tender fingers.
“Aaahhh!” I screeched.
It had turned to flames.
It’s dark smoke filled the room like the questions filling my head!
It’s dark smoke filled the room like the questions filling my head!
'As the smoke cleared' I saw there was nothing left except…
“A note!” I muttered as a small shred of paper fluttered towards me.
‘You shall never win,'
'D.A.V.’
“NOOOOO!” I shrieked as I dropped to my knees.
“This isn’t over!” I screamed as a tear rolled down my cheek.
What an amazing piece of writing. I like your use of adjectives like 'glittering' and 'tender.' I also like your use of speech marks. What makes this an enjoyable piece of writing for me is that it contains mystery, action and a promise of more to come. By the way - what was the trophy for?
ReplyDeleteI look forward to your next blog post.
Hey Bella, love this piece of writing!
ReplyDeleteI was so drawn in by your captivating start and then shocked by you twist!
What did you win the trophy for?
You definitely should write a sequel!
Can't wait for your next one!
-Nikita